大學英語經典作文簡評

　　每一個英語專業的大學生，和英語之間都有一種不可言說的聯絡。下面是小編給大家整理的，供大家參閱!

　　：The Label I Wore

　　Today, most of my friends will probably describe me as an out going and somewhat talkative girl, displaying her boldness in study as well as various social activities. But several years ago,when I was in middle school, things were quite the opposite. Despite my outstanding grade record, I once belonged to a group that demanded little notice due to my childhood personality. People around labeled me as "timid", and that label, regardless of the so much bitter feeling it aroused, has become something of a lifetime influence on me.

　　As a child, I took after my mother and was quiet, shy and somewhat clumsy at verbal expression. The problem, as I often reflected upon, was not that I was unsociable or eccentric, for all of my classmates and teachers mingled well with me. It was that I would blush and feel dizzy when many people looked at me at the same time. I was so uneasy in public that I am inclined to shut my mouth, which sadly resulted in my label "timidity".

　　Bearing such a label was anything but easy for me to tolerate. Every time I finally plucked up enough courage to raise my hand and tried to air my view, I stood there only to find the rest fifty pairs of eyes fixing on me, all with the same trace of surprise and doubt in them as if a quiet person like me were not supposed to talk in public. Distress immediately seized me and I began to stutter, swallowed up my well contrived speech and retreated into my seat. I felt abased and hurt.

　　Never had I found the label so annoying and detestable as on those occasions. An inner voice again and again clattered in my not inferior or dull. Why can't you just talk freely like the talkative? If you wanna have a change, it's up to you yourself. The biggest obstacle lay inside me. As long as I could overcome my timidity, the rest would take care of itself.

　　And in those years, never had I stopped this painstaking yet extremely rewarding shift from speechlessness to verbal strength. At the beginning, I prompted myself to give simple yes or no questions. In a step by step fashion, I was then supposed to talk in long sentences, to discuss and to present. Urged by an inner drive, I took pains with the transition and witnessed with the utmost joy the change I was going through. For the first time, I didn't feel uneasy under public attention. For the first time, my response to teacher's question was applauded. I rejoiced in every bit of progress I made. Confidence began to set root in me and I, like a straying child who catches sight of home,was gradually led back to my mesmerized eloquence. I finally recovered what I had been craving for so long.

　　Now years have passed when the label of timidity no longer haunts me. I find this experience most valuable and interesting in retrospection. No doubt, labeling exerts profound influence on

　　individual's development and the common belief is that people will live up to their labels, implying that positive labels inspire and encourage us whereas negative ones only worsen the situation. But after all, no matter how disheartened or frustrated we feel about the prejudice, we are the sole masters of our own destinies. Why fall victims to the label? As Franklin D. Roosevelt said, "The only thing we have to fear is fear itself." The point is to free ourselves from the fear for negative labels and cheer up inside us the unrelenting will to overthrow them. The label is something of a mirror. As long as we adjust ourselves, the reflections in the mirror will alter too. In this sense, negative labeling may as well become something extremely positive and rewarding, just as I've experienced.

　　簡 評

　　世界上最難戰勝的就是自我，在自我的軟弱面前是沉默，還是勇敢地去面對?挑戰自我，你會發現人生變得更有意義了。

　　第一、二、四段最後一句都出現了timidity一詞，緊扣主題。keyword的重複出現，加深讀者印象，增強文章的節奏感。

　　第三段的心理描繪，細膩真實，抓住一個細節進行放大，把筆者的心理表達得淋漓盡致。文章用詞準確，表達生動，如作者寫到試圖在眾人面前說話時，“I finally plucked up enough courage to raise my hand and tried tO air my view...”可她卻發現此刻，“Distress immediately seized me and l began tO Stutter，swallowed up my well-contrived sveech and retreated into my seat.”面對這樣的挫敗，她並不氣餒，一段簡短的自白，道出了她的決心：“You're not inferior or dull.Why can't you just talk freely like the talkative?If you wanna have a chance，it's up to you yourself.”在戰勝怯懦的過程中，她曾經感到annoymg and detestable，可她所付出努力是painstaking yet extremely rewarding，戰勝怯懦後的感覺是most valuable and interesting。此外，作者的表達準確，用詞靈活、生動，駕馭語言的能力很強。

　　冒雯雯同學給我們留下了一個鼓舞人心又有啟迪意義的結論，借用美國總統Franklin的話告訴我們“The only thing we have to fear is fear itself.”並且，以一個淺顯的比喻，形象地講出了這個影響她一生性格的深刻道理。這個結尾是積極的，耐人尋味的。

　　點評教師：盧愛華

　　：Spare the Rod

　　In some old fashioned traditions, there is a saying, "spare the rod, spoil the child," which is worshipped by dictatorial parents and has long been a polite excuse for cruel body punishment. As to my opinion, it is not right and nor reasonable.

　　First, let us focus on the victim; the children. No matter what wrong they have done, they are still children, children who are characterized by their vague concept of good or evil, by their little knowledge of what to do or not, by their straightforward desire for others' love and care. They live in the pristine world of their heart. Such mistakes that appear intolerable to parents may be their first step to discover nature or their initial attempt to communicate with people. But what await them is only severe punishment, which breaks their heart, destroys their trust,roughs their temper, makes them conservative, and successfully leads them to build a wall to protect themselves while isolate from the world. This is no kidding. The famous psychiatrist Dr Freud, who is a master in studying the effect of early age experience on later life, proves that childhood experience makes both superficial and underlying significance in one's lifetime. And statistics also show that adult or adolescence violence has something to do with early life circumstance. A child living in an environment of violence will be doomed to become violent.

　　In contrast, love is what children need first and foremost.Kind words, gentle smile, sincere praise, proper encouragement, all these elements contribute to the formation of fine character and optimistic attitude. Please spare the rod.

　　Secondly, let us concentrate on the performer; the parents.Before our discussion, we can safely ignore the irrational parents. This sort of parents beat children because of their own distorted mentality stemming from their miserable life or abnormalgenes. Or theybeat them just for fun! The rational parents, unlikely, are in strong hopes to see their children superior to othgenes. Or theybeat them just for fun! The rational parents, unlikely, are in strong hopes to see their children superior to others. Thus, they apply discipline, which radically turns to riolence, meanwhile their hearts are bleeding. "We love our children so we beat them." These parents say, in order to persuade themselves rather than persuade others to accept their way of education. But a scream rises higher and higher from their heart saying, beating our child is no better than beating ourselves, yet what should we do to prevent their falling in pits, to protect them from drugs, street gangs, pornography without beating them? But I wonder, does beating work? It is not a remedy, but a poison. Under such pressure, children easily rebel and betray themselves. Their parents' action in the pursuit of gratitude and love from their children only calls for hatred. This is a lose lose solution undoubtedly. Please spare the rod.

　　After all, it comes to a problem of how to educate children.Instead of using rod, love could be a better solution, which works better, harms less, as I've mentioned before. Make good use of it, the children no longer need to feel bitter, the parents no longer need to reproach themselves, and the society will be more harmonic.

　　Please spare the rod.

　　簡 評

　　在中國，體罰有時是一種教育子女的方法。本文作者運用心理學理論說明體罰將對孩子的身心健康造成嚴重傷害，並分析了父母“不打不成材”的錯誤心態，一針見血地指出棍棒教育不是良方，而是毒藥，作者再三呼喚：放下你的棍子!在嚴厲譴責棍棒教育的同時，對孩子的殷殷關切之情溢於言表。

　　本文的最大特色在於，作者借用多種寫作技巧和論證方法將自己的感情融入議論之中。如引用權威——弗洛伊德的理論譴責體罰將造成孩子性格扭曲時說，“this is nokidding'’，義正詞嚴;強調體罰的傷害時，用“severe punishment breaks their heart，destroy their trust，rough their temper，make them conservative，and isolate them from the world'’的排比，喚起了讀者的深深憂慮;對父母體罰心態的深入討論，也是聲情並茂;各段末“spare the rod"祈使句的反覆使用，強化了文章的感染力。此外還運用了比喻、描寫等手法，達到了動之以情，曉之以理的寫作效果。

　　：Leaving

　　The sun shone bright onto my face, dancing on my eyelids.Within a few seconds I opened my eyes to a new day so full of promise and hope, just like the morning sunshine. However, the lovely day would have to be a sad one, for I'd have to leave my home for college.

　　Turning around, my mother fixed her eyes on the phone.Blinking back tears, she forced her attention elsewhere. Mum got herself busy and did all the things she needed to do. Still,my rare silence made the house strangely empty. However, like the fledgling, I had to fly away and find my place in the world.She knew this in her mind, yet her heart was still saddened.

　　Time marched on and there was nothing we could do to stop it. Soon we were in the running car, feeling the warm breeze on our faces. Maybe it's quite a suitable time to show love to each other, but neither of us said anything.

　　The sun finally dipped below the horizon, and we were in different places. No calls from home, though I knew exactly what she was doing then. She must have turned away from the phone so as not to see it, and continued to do the endless house work as usual.

　　No choice is perfect in the world. But I will always be grateful for the priceless gift that day gave me: the wisdom to know that all our experience in life does not make us less but more able to love.

　　簡 評

　　考上大學了，離家的心情相信所有經歷過的人都不會忘記。對家庭的依戀，對父母的牽掛，對新生活的嚮往和對未知世界的憂慮，讓人百感交集，又有些不知所措。

　　作者這篇優美的散文通過對離家赴校那一天的景物、人物、事件的描寫，成功而完整地抒發了自己這種複雜的心情。

　　文章語言純正，妙筆生花，字裡行間飽含著真情，感人至深。展現在我們面前的是一幅羽翼初長的雛鳥勇敢地朝著自己的理想展翅高飛的畫面。總結部分也非常真實而貼切：生命中的各種經歷，是讓我們學會更好地去愛。看到這裡，哪有人不被感動的呢?

　　點評教師：時麗娜

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