高考英語滿分作文點評解析

　　看看別人在高考上寫的英語作文為什麼能夠得到滿分，它們有什麼突出的地方?下面是小編給大家整理的，供大家參閱!

　　全國卷

　　【試題回放】假定你是李華，正在英國接受英語培訓，住在一戶英國人家裡。今天你的房東Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你準備外出，請給Mrs. Wilson 寫一留言條，內容包括：

　　1.外出購物

　　2.替房東還書

　　3.Tracy 來電話留言：1***咖啡屋***Bolton Coffee***見面取消

　　2***此事已告知Susan

　　3*** 儘快回電

　　注意：1. 詞數100左右;

　　2.可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。

　　Mrs. Wilson,

　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　[名師點評]

　　本文屬於提綱式要點作文，是學生比較熟悉的題材，體現了英語學習應該注意實用性，生活型的原則。行文人稱、時態運用恰當、準確，各個要點間邏輯連貫，行文通順。提綱類書面表達不是簡單的逐條翻譯，而是將所給的幾個要點合理的組成比較通順的語句，因此要仔細組織語言，合理安排結構。在語言方面，要特別注意簡潔明瞭，開頭要開門見山。

　　北京

　　【試題回放】情景作文

　　假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華，為響應綠化祖國的號召，你班四月十二日去郊區植樹，請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，介紹植樹活動的全過程，給某英文雜誌的“綠色行動”專欄寫一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。

　　注意：詞數不少於60

　　提示詞：郊區suburbs

　　April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

　　【名師點評】

　　本文是設計巧妙的提綱要點式作文，與環保結合，立意較好。文章思路清晰，要點連貫，在語言的表達上選詞新穎，同時運用了分詞短語作狀語等較好的句式表達。

　　江蘇

　　【試題回放】滑鼠是計算機時代最佳的人機互動工具之一。它極大地方便了人們的計算機操作。但是，過分依賴滑鼠的習慣也會帶來一些不利影響。請你以滑鼠為切入點，根據下表所提示的資訊，用英語寫一篇短文。

　　滑鼠的必要性對多數人來說，操作計算機，上網衝浪……

　　滑鼠的便捷性點選、移動、插入、拷貝、刪除……編輯文字，搜尋資訊……

　　收發郵件，選購商品……

　　點播音樂，下載電影……

　　如果過分依賴滑鼠…… ***請考生結合自身感受，列舉兩到三點***

　　注意：

　　1.對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發揮，不要簡單翻譯。

　　2.詞數150左右。開頭已經寫好，不計人總詞數。

　　3.作文中不得提及考生所在學校和本人姓名。

　　The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

　　For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.

　　A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.

　　【名師點評】

　　本文為提綱式說明文體裁，所選內容與我們生活相關，考生只要把所給要點逐條陳述，適度發揮，不要逐條翻譯即可。文章說理清楚，語言流暢，句式表達多樣，用詞恰當、準確。不失為一篇滿分作文

　　全國卷

　　【試題回放】假定你是李華，從小喜愛大熊貓***panda***,一直通過有關網站***website***關注三年前在美國聖迭哥動物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳”和她的母親“白雲”。現在蘇琳即將三歲。請根據以下要點給動物園工作人員寫一封信：

　　1、 自我介紹; 2、祝賀蘇琳生日; 3、感謝工作人員; 4、索取蘇琳三歲生日照。

　　注意：1、詞數100左右;2、可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫;3、開頭語已為你寫好。

　　例文：

　　Dear Sir/Madam,

　　Greetings from China!

　　I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　【名師點評】本文寫作的內容要點如下：

　　1.自我介紹;2.資訊來源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結尾。

　　這封信格式正確，行文規範，描述有條不紊，稱呼、正文中的開頭及結尾、結束語均表達到位。文章行文活潑，感情真摯，語言表述準確，洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情，以及希望自己願望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理，結合了簡單句和複合句，流暢自然，不露痕跡，的確是一篇佳作。

　　積累卡片英漢互譯

　　好詞1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快樂的2.express v.表達 3.give birth to v.產生，生育

　　好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

　　我祝福它生日快樂並且對你們的辛勤工作表達我的感激之情，正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國過著幸福和健康的生活。

　　評析：定語從句的使用。

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