大學英語優秀範文簡評

　　我們每一個英語專業的大學生生活都有一段與英語作文難言的故事。下面是小編給大家整理的，供大家參閱!

　　：The Legend of Room 3108

　　Room 3108 is a legend, a myth, and a folklore of great endeavor, hardships, and pursuit. In a word, it is a shrine of the hardworking students in Fudan.

　　Every morning, when the sunshine penetrates into the room, the night owls wrap up their books and leave. Then, with bread in their mouths, new comers rush in for the daily lessons.

　　A new day begins.

　　In the sunny splendor of early spring, the pied magpies are showing off their sweet voice outside the window. Inside the classroom, students are working hard to fulfil their desires desires to explore the uncharted frontier of science and technology, desires to clear up the unsolved social and economic problems, desires to achieve breakthroughs of engineering, and desires to combat fatal diseases. All lives in the room are in full swing.

　　As the sunshine fades, the shrine reaches its climax in a day. Different lectures compete with each other on this arena.All the attention is focused on the lecturer and the applause from audience is the first award. Occasionally, a student sneaks in to occupy a seat for tomorrow's lesson. Almost no one notices him, for all the people have their eyes fixed on every gesture,every expression and every word of the lecturer, devouring as much as they can until the emcee officially declares the conclusion of the lecture.

　　Then, come the night owls. Students, from freshmen to seniors, write and read, trying every means to work with high efficiency. As the midnight approaches, drowsiness would press most learners out of the room. Still, a certain number are nailed on the seats till the daybreak.

　　That's Room 3108, a shrine for the hardworking knowledge seekers.

　　簡 評

　　本文用生動的筆墨描寫了3108教室中學生廢寢忘食地學習知識的情景。作者在文章開始用四個比喻來形容3108教室a legend，a myth，and a folklore ofgreat endeavor，hardships，and pursuit，a shrine of the hard working in Fudan。然後作者按時間順序展開了3108教室中一天的場景，從早上徹夜奮戰的學生疲憊地離去，直至午夜仍有不少學生抓緊分分秒秒在自習。其中，作者詳細描述了晚上在3108教室中做各種學術報告的情景，突出了學生強烈的求知慾，

　　本文的另一個值得一提的是作者在第三段中用了四個有desire引起的並列成分，概括了文理工醫各門學科的復旦學子都在刻苦學習，攀登高峰，3108教室只是整個校園的一個縮影。筆建議最好能選取幾個有代表性的例子，具體地描寫他們刻苦學習的情景，做到點面結合，使文章更加有血有肉，令人信服。

　　點評教師：黃鶯

　　：My University——Fudan

　　No classical work could pervade every cubic centimeter of air with such cultural fragrance but she.

　　No judicious sage could merge various elements as a magnificent poem but she.

　　No green tree could consist of vivid cells arousing every heart's anxiety for being young forever but she.

　　She is my university Fudan University.

　　The first time I entered the campus as a freshman, I was deeply attracted by her cultural atmosphere and historical connotation. Fudan is a graceful lady who is accustomed to serenity but meanwhile each action of hers outpours her innermost tern perament. Apparently it is worth every effort to probe into her world for the sake of both physical and mental enrichment. Her humanistic spirit inspires me to care for everything around, even the most trivial one.

　　On the other hand, catching up with the times, Fudan is modern and smart. You see, the many age-old buildings here are actually great libraries and labs. Scientific and technological developrnent is easily smelt in the air,because she never lags behind the world.

　　Fabulously, such a historical and scientific school is far more than an operational mechanism. Her everlasting youth and vigor beam through every corner of the campus and the young in school vivify every piece of concrete and wood here. What makes me happy and strong is that it perpetuates me with unfading energy. And it is definitely beneficial for me to be granted enthusi

　　Another deep impression of my university is her creativity and profundity. As is known to all, she has a wide range and comprehensive style. No wonder I can enjoy the multi-ceolored life here. Every school year a diversity of competitions and aetivities are held and a large number of students take active part in them. I do appreciate such a style, and in my mind's eye, she resembles a tall tree silhouetting with all shapes of branches while stretching far into the blue sky.

　　Undoubtedly there is a world of difference between university and high school. University students are supposed to enjoy more freedom to develop themselves. However, Fudan seems more concerned about the efficient cooperation and teamwork among students as to prepare them for the competitive society. I believe upon graduation I will be equipped with abundant skills to face more unknown challenges.

　　After all, in my opinion, university is for more cultivated character, richer knowledge and greater abilities. That's why I chose Fudan. She provides me with what I've dreamed of.

　　Now all kinds of successes are in sight every day, and all I have to do is endeavor for a more beautiful future...

　　簡 評

　　“日月光華，旦復旦兮。”她既承前啟後，又多姿多彩;她有著悠久的歷史傳統，深厚的文化底蘊;她與時俱進，開拓創新;她古老的血脈中永遠流淌著年輕的血液;她蔥鬱的校園裡永遠穿梭著活躍的身影……

　　這就是作者筆下的復旦。她是一個夢想成真的世界，一方辛勤耕耘的土地;她是茁壯成長的樂園，更是撐起未來的支點。

　　這篇散文以詩一般的語言，淋漓盡致地表現了作者對母校的深情厚意，對大學生活的熱愛和對未來的憧憬。全文文筆流暢，玲瓏精巧，婉轉動人，給人一種“清風朗月”的美妙感受。

　　不過，應該指出的是，文中有些比喻比較牽強。另外，文章的結構也還不夠緊湊。

　　點評教師：時麗娜

　　：A Little Garden

　　I was attracted by the scenery out of the window the first day I came to my dormitory and since then it has become my hab it to sit by the window and enjoy the wonderful scenery. Every time my roommates see me absorbed in it, they shake their heads, puzzled. To them, there is nothing more than a deserted piece of grassland outside the window. But it is their misfortune to fail to find the wonder and the beauty.

　　The little garden, as I name it, is fenced at one end by the school wall and at the other by our five storied dormitory building. A couple of tropical trees stand straight at the corner. Such is the small but lovely garden. I like sitting in my chair by the window and looking at it affectionately. It takes on new appearances in different seasons, so I never feel bored.

　　The garden looks very poor in winter. The grass has withered and the bare trees stand lonely in the chilly wind. But when spring comes, the trees are decorated by greenish new leaves and the grassland is dotted with small white flowers. One afternoon after many days'rain, under the blue sky with some drifting clouds, some students are lying on the grass, enjoying the sun shine. I am glad to find someone else to appreciate this place.

　　But my favorite moment is at night. After a whole day's hard work, I throw myself into the window chair. Breathing the fresh air, feeling the soft breeze, and listening to the leaves rustling, I feel refreshed. The whole world seems ready to sleep,and my little garden is dozing off. I enjoy this peaceful moment and gain release for my thoughts.

　　Perhaps the small garden has something deeper that arouses my admiration. It is deserted but it has never abandoned itself.It is not taken care of but it takes care of itself. It suffers the sweltering heat and freezing cold but never yields to all the hardships.

　　簡 評

　　本文描寫了作者窗前一塊不為人知的草地，稱之為“小花園”。作者的“小花園”中沒有奇花異草，只有一塊草地，角落中長著幾棵熱帶樹木，但作者卻感受到了其樸素的美。寒冷的冬天，草木凋零;春天來臨，小花園中充滿了生命的氣息：嫩綠的樹木，點綴著小白花，藍天白雲之下，一些學生躺在草地上享受陽光。作者重點描寫了小花園的夜景，呼吸著新鮮的空氣，感受著清風拂面，作者感到重新精神煥發。

　　文章最後一段點明主題，說明作者喜愛“小花園”的原因在於其頑強的生命力，在惡劣的環境中仍自強不息。文章寄情於景，立意深刻。

　　文章文筆流暢，雖然沒有什麼華麗的辭藻，樸素的語言非常清新自然，如the trees are decorated by greenis hnew leaves and the grassland is dotted with small white flowers;under the blue sky with some drifting clouds;my little garden is dozing off，讀來令人處處感受到生活的氣息。

　　點評教師：黃鶯

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